Question:
Help! I need a name for my story! Please! :D haha?
Baloo
2008-11-16 19:15:03 UTC
okay, it's in script format. I'll probably need to post more details to finish it. Thanks!















UNTITLED SCRIPT















By Me (no names given out)















Summary-

Olivia, 15, is at the park with her boyfriend, Max. She thinks back to her old boyfriend, Bruce. The memory is in the same spot about a year ago. They get in and argument that turns out physical. Bruce tries to kill her. Olivia escapes just in time. Back to present day.

Later that night, Olivia is just getting in bed when she hears Max whimpering for help. He’s crouched by the door. Suddenly Bruce opens the door. He has a prison outfit and a gun. Olivia escapes the room without Max. Checks back to get him when Bruce knocks her out.

She and Max later wakeup in the desert with Bruce. Although they manage to temporarily escape, Bruce appears and uses some sort of weird power and kills Max. Olivia runs off. Max finds her and is about to kill her when she wakes up screaming in her bedroom.

It was all just a nightmare. Or was it? Bruce is waiting outside her bedroom door and kills her.

Credits roll.























EXT: FADE IN – GRASSY PARK – DAY

The park is bright and full of people.

OLIVIA, 15, a happy, beautiful looking girl, sits on a park bench with her head lying on MAX’s shoulder. Max is tall, slender, and likable. Olivia has a dreamy look. Max strokes her hair.

OLIVIA
Love you, Max.

MAX
Love you too, Olivia.

They sit again for a while.

OLIVIA
Do you mean it?

Max lifts his head, a bit confused.

MAX
Mean what?

Olivia also lifts her head and looks at Max.

OLIVIA
I mean, do you really love me?

MAX
Of course I love you, why would you doubt me?

Olivia thinks for a moment.

OLIVIA
I was just, well, remembering something.

They put their heads back. Olivia stares into space.

Suddenly we see Olivia’s flashback. It’s the same park, but she’s about a year younger. The park is empty except for a WOMAN sitting farther away by herself. She sits at the same bench with another boy. His name is Bruce. He’s 14 or 15 with a large build. Possibly a football player? Has the scared up face type of look without the scars. Her head is on his shoulder.

OLIVIA
Love you, Bruce.

BRUCE
Love you too, Olivia.

OLIVIA
Do you mean it?

They lift there heads up.

BRUCE
You mean loving you?

OLIVIA
M hm. Do you really mean-

BRUCE
Of course I mean it. Why would you ever think differently?

OLIVIA
It’s just that, well, never mind.

Bruce gets up and looks mad.

BRUCE
Wait. You mean that after everything I’ve done for you, you doubt my love towards you?

OLIVIA
Bruce, please, calm down. I was just-

BRUCE (ANGRILLY)
No I know what you ment! You ment that you thought I was a faker! Don’t try to cover it up!

OLIVIA
Bruce, please, not again. If you keep acting up like you do, I’m not sure I want to be with you anymore!

BRUCE (SCREAMING)
Are you breaking up with me?

Olivia gets up too to face him. She’s obviously gone through this before.

OLIVIA
Well maybe I am!

Bruce gives her a push, just hard enough to knock her back a little. She quickly recovers and pushes him back, though causing no harm. Bruce screams at her.

BRUCE
No one breaks up with me!

He shoves her hard this time, sending her flying onto the ground. The WOMAN notices and pulls out her cell phone.

BRUCE
I can’t believe I ever liked you!

Bruce is about to punch her on the ground when he notices the woman dialing 9-11. He turns his head to her and starts running toward her. She’s on the phone yelling “Help, help!” when Bruce slams her to the ground. He grabs her cell phone and throws it across the park. He then turns around to run to Olivia only to see she’s no longer there. Sirens are heard in the distance.

Memory ends.

Back the present day with Max.

MAX
I’ll always love you, my Olivia.

OLIVIA
You don’t know how much that means to me.

INT: OLIVIA’S BEDROOM – THAT NIGHT

We see Olivia enter the room with her pajamas on. There’s a nightlight on by the door and a lamp by her bed. She goes into her bed and turns off the lamp. We see the light glow of the nightlight. She dozes off.

She suddenly wakes up to the quite voice of Max. He is not seen.

MAX
Help me, Olivia.

Olivia jumps out of bed to see Max. We see him crouched down by the nightlight and door. He has the living daylights scared out of him. He’s in his clothes from earlier that day.

MAX
Help me. He’s out to kill both of us.

OLIVIA
Max, what’s happening? Why are you in here?

MAX
We’re both going to die. He’s coming for us.

OLIVIA
Max, who is?

MAX
He’s going to kill us.

OLIVIA
WHO???

The door creeks open to reveal older Bruce. He’s wearing a prison suit and holding a gun. Max creeps his hand over to Bruce.

MAX
Him.

Olivia screams bloody murder and
Nine answers:
Kiara R
2008-11-16 19:28:43 UTC
it cant be too short or too complex...somethin that relates to the story, but doesnt give it away. mayb...."olivias visions"..or "connections"

i think connections is best though because it will get the reader less confused of the plot in the story. by the wayy, thats a really good story, i got all into it.
Booboo
2008-11-16 20:20:18 UTC
maybe i would name it "Wish It Was a Dream" or something similar with that meaning.. that way, when people watch (or read) this play, they would assume that the whole scene was going to be real n not a dream.



but at the end of the scene, when olivia wakes up panting from her nightmare, viewers get confused because it was actually a dream.



n then when bruce actually comes up and kills her at the end of the story is when they actually get the real meaning of the title.



good luck. u have talent. keep it up.
anonymous
2008-11-16 19:18:25 UTC
Two Sides of Olivia
anonymous
2008-11-16 19:32:17 UTC
Go with Dangerous Obsession. Keep writing.
Lady Tifferz
2008-11-16 19:18:05 UTC
Call it Dream
Andrea R
2008-11-17 07:33:28 UTC
How about just "Obsession"? Short titles are catchy.
anonymous
2008-11-16 19:20:48 UTC
a nightmares killing

it is king of gruesome but so is your story

hope u like my suggestion
dmx03
2008-11-16 19:23:47 UTC
bloody date
anonymous
2008-11-16 20:08:24 UTC
How bout just "Bruce"?


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